THE TITANIA LEGACY
~PROLOGUE~
Once there was a story
of a great fight with the evil magus Zaman'Ra. Zaman'Ra was
spreading terror all over Titania. All races and its leader were scared of
Zaman'Ra but one person. His name is Aquilam. He is only a
little warrior from a little village of Erde. He encouraged the
leaders of all race in Titania. They made an alliance between them.
Even the elves ceased their fight with the dwarfs. Although their
conflict had gone for centuries but they got a truce since they know the
biggest enemy here is Zaman'Ra and his golem army. All races came in peace and
stood in one name Titania. There are no beastmen, dragons, elves and many other
races. There was only one name that is Titanians. Then the alliances made a
pair of sword. They are called the sword of sun and moon, the cursed and the
holy one, the dark and the light, the black and white, its name
is gladium umbræ and gladium lucis. The sword was made using
sideralis metal. The hardest metal in Titania. Only the fire from dragon’s
mouth can melt it. Only by the best forger of the dwarven can forge it. And
only by the magic of elves can enhance it. Then the alliances call
the six sages of life to make 6 jewels that will enhance its
power. After five year of harsh fight the alliance won. They sealed Zaman'Ra's
power in a magic prison on the center of the earth. The kingdom lived in peace
and harmony after that. There is no more fight between races. The ruler
of Titania is King Corvax the II. He is the grandson of Aquilam. When
King Corvax is meditating suddenly he hears a voice “ Corvax the time
of peace and harmony will end now. I sense that Zaman'Ra loyal
servant descendant Vulturius will release Zaman'Ra. Now
seal the sword and hide with your son back to your ancestors land.”
after hearing that he goes to the throne room and tell his guardian to go
outside the room. Then he shout 'Six Sages of life come forth now and take the
six element jewels. Seal the sword of dark into my son body then seal the sword
of light into the girl that have been fated to wield it. So the power will not
fall into Zaman'Ra's hand.' then from nowhere there are six hooded men
standing in front of Corvax. They took the jewel and the swords.
Corvax lift his six month old son body up and the sage of shadow stabbed the
boy with the sword of the dark. But to his surprise the boy didn’t even got a
scratch. Then the sword slowly faded and left a mark at his left arm. A mark of
a black angel wing. Then the six sage of life without any word disappear.
Corvax took his baby boy and ran away from his castle to the land of his
ancestor the land of Erde.
Woah an interesting start! You laid out such a vast universe within limited number of words. I am genuinely fascinated. And the fact that you've already started composing it in 2009 must have meant during the three years you've compiled a solid well-twisted story which would certainly impress the readers. Good luck kiddo, I have great confidence that you will produce a remarkable piece out of this story. The theme of legend, fantasy, and adventure is awesome too! Peace ^.^
ReplyDeleteDomo arigato gozaimashita Hina-Senpai ^.^
DeleteYou know who am I. As requested, I will just go straightforward alright?
ReplyDeleteMy problem remains the same as I have told you before. You lack description in this story, and also, punctuation. Your grammar has drastically improved (gara-gara guru bahasa inggris xD) and I'm not gonna comment on it again.
Overall you have a good plot, clear writing-style which is very good for starting a story. Keep up the good work!
Even i quite dont understand #plak haha , because i think that your writting skill and idea as same as profesional writter! Even maybe you can publish this into real novel! XD keep moving !haha
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